What’s that noise.
Waking up in the middle of the night hearing a Whisper from outside. I hopped out bed and run down stair to go and check what was that noise soon the got louder and said “I’m in the woods”. Walking in to the woods i heard the whisper again.
Freaking out but still eager to find what that Whisper was I quickly dodged all tree’s stick and rock’s. Finding out what was Whispering was going to be harder than I thought Lost in the woods not knowing the back to my home I Didn't have a choice but to find that Whisper.
Lost from home I started to panic. Looking around I saw a shadow running away I was tired but still wanted to find Who was making the Whisper so I followed the shadow all the way to the center out the of the wood’s puffed out I could hardly breath I saw the shadow stop.
Looking around I still couldn't find what that noise was lost in the wood’s I knew that i would never my back home. Just then I heard someone laughing I followed the laugh and it lead me a camp with my friends Texas and jacob laughing out loud they saw me walking surprise said Texas and jacob as i was frightened whisper again ha what was that whisper that i just heard what that’s just the owls that’s the whisper.
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ReplyDeleteMy name is Shakeya Andrews and I am a student in EDM 310 at the University of South Alabama.
I loved reading your blog because there was a lot of suspicion going on throughout your story. I could picture you in the woods being frightened by the noise you heard. I thought maybe a bear was after you, but it turned out to be an owl. Overall good job however, I have one suggestion for you. Make sure every "I" in your paragraph is capitalized and for the sentence "I’m in the wood’s” you don't need to put an apostrophe after the d. You kept me as the reader on edge!
Hi, Isiah! My name is Miriah Grantham and I am a student in EDM310 at the University of South Alabama. I loved reading your blog because I love action! Your story was very suspenseful, and very entertaining. I love how descriptive you were because it allowed me to make a movie in my head and really imagine what was going on! Make sure you don't capitalize words that do not need to be capitalized throughout the story, other than that, Greta job, I enjoyed it :) granthammiriahedm310.blogspot.com
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